September 16, 2010
Battle of the Betas ~ Part 2
How do you beta? That was the question Sarah Enni asked a few weeks ago. A group of us got together and answered using her first page. It was so fun that today we're doing round two, and author Alicia Gregoire has bravely stepped up to the proverbial plate. Here's my feedback on her first page (click to enlarge):
Overall, I'd say Alicia is burying the coolest elements of her story inside explanations of less important things. Dump the backstory and start with the three-headed monster.
That's something I don't get to say every day. Ahhh the life of a writer.
Anyway. That's just one opinion-- check out Meredith, Windy, Sarah, Cory and Raven's blogs to see five more takes on this intro!